Dave Harris posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 2:40am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Not sure what you mean when you say that Millicent's home is in the "West Counties". From the directions to Birmingham, I'm assuming you mean "Home Counties".

Otherwise, most intriguing again. Looks like Harry's got trouble if he's got to get through all the Death Eaters to get to Hogwarts... unless he's already disposed of most of them already, that is?!

Aaran St Vines replied:

From Little Whinging, roughly due west, I found Somerset. This counties south of Wales and still in England I thought were called the West Counties. Millicent's home is about 120 miles south and east of Birmingham. That's where my geography comes from.

Christopher Patton posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 2:11am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Both of these parts have very well done. It's great to see someone explore something different. I'll be looking forward to more of this story.

Todd Rodgers posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 2:10am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

As always, an excellent story. This is shaping up to be a really interesting read, though it seems to poke a couple of holes into being pre-history, since it implied that Harry hadn't spoken to Millicent when he heard about her parent's deaths. Maybe he had to convince Dumbledore to keep secret from Snape that he brought Millicent to Hogwarts, but that's all I can come up with for continuity.

I think you deal with Harry dealing with Millicent's physical needs quite well, at least in terms of "your" Harry and the way he would have had to be educated -- by Hermione. I really don't know why McGonagall hasn't had to give him the talk yet.

At any rate, I really enjoyed the writing, and I look forward to the next chapter of this as well as the next chapters of This Is War/Granger Defense

Aaran St Vines replied:

I added a note after your review to explain this. These first few chapters take place less than two weeks after fifth year ends. It's before Aberration Day and Harry and Millicent's chat in the other two Paladin stories. This tale will deviate substantially from those two. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

haphazard1 posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 2:07am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

It was great to see the notification of a new chapter for this story. I'm really enjoying this version of the Paladin universe.

The tension and struggle in this chapter as Harry evades (or fights off) the searchers and keeps them moving, was very nicely done. And the interaction between Harry and Centi as they endure their ordeal is great. As another reviewer said, it's not the overfast instant relationship but something more real, as the two learn about each other.

Great work, and I hope we see more from the Paladin universe sometime soon. You've left Harry and Centi in a pretty tough spot, after all. :-)

Quizer posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 12:44am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

A great chapter. You're really turning this ride to Hogwarts into riveting struggle. You could have made it easier, but this does make it more exciting, and in the end, more worthwhile. I hope they catch a break soon and make it to Hogwarts safely.

I like the interaction between Harry and Millicent. She is often quite blunt and regularly falls back into her unfriendly persona, but I guess the fact that they are communicating with thoughts has something to do with that. Still, a bond like theirs, forged in the fires of adversity, can grow quite strong. I'm looking forward to see how things develop when the crisis is over.


Until the next chapter!


Quizer

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 12:40am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Good to see this being continued but did you have to leave us on quite such a cliffhanger?

Interesting nickname for Millicent. I still really like eye-speaking as a means of communication. Loved the action scenes with the Death Eaters and also Dawlish - nicely done. I think poor Harry is going to need more than Lucozade and ibuprofen to get him through this. Centi continues to be interesting. More please.

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 12:30am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

A great chapter. The interaction between Harry and Centi is coming along great, not any rush into 'you saved me, one kiss, and marriage...baby carriage', but a slow developing relationship between two people who really didn't know each other before now. Nice to see Harry learning what he needs to do to help out, as well as what happens with theothers following him, and you left it enough that things will be tight in the next chapter, though if they make it to Hogwarts more undamaged, then I will be looking forward to what this will mean for Harry and his new ally/friend from that point on, and what the changes will bring to Millicent as well.

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 12:27am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Very exciting! Great chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.